#1
C4C. seeing if this is worth continuing even tho i only plan on adding one more verse.

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She'll Never Think Of Me

This is a song for
The one I care deeply for
She doesn’t know that
I am constantly knocking on her door
She never answers
Why isn’t she ever home for me?
Maybe I should just
Accept the fact that she’ll never think of me

We met through a friend
Who thought we’d be happy together
I’d ask her to dinner
She said I have other plans, maybe later
I geuss that I have to
Forget about her and move on with my life
Constanly thinking about
The one person I can’t live without

This is a song for
The one I care deeply for
She doesn’t know that
I am constantly knocking on her door
She never answers
Why isn’t she ever home for me?
Maybe I should just
Accept the fact that she’ll never think of me
Rigz.
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#2
nah
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Woman tone, eh?

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#3
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nah



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I really liked it, it sounds Streetlight-ish. You a ska fan?
Your mother likes it ruff, Trebeck.
#4
Quote by you = fail


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I really liked it, it sounds Streetlight-ish. You a ska fan?



a tad. but the song isn't ska-ish haha
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#5
well... it comes off as stalkerish...
imo.


it is pretty simple too.
i really think it would make a great ska song...
but nothing else probably..
unless you want to play the bull**** they're playing on the radio nowadays... haha
#6
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I really liked it, it sounds Streetlight-ish. You a ska fan?

sounds like Katrina by Catch 22.
#7
Well I've never been a fan of starting off a song with the chorus but it could very well work for you here. I also think that you keep the song very slow and kinda play on your vulnerability, while expressing your sorrow through your singing - then this could be a very good song.

As for the lyrics, what you see is what you get, which is not necessarily a bad thing. However, since you don't put yourself out there for the reader to feel your pain in the lyrics, then you will have to in your performance of it (that is, if you record it). If you listen to the song "Mother" by John Lennon you can see what I mean: the lyrics themselves are very straightforward and don't offer much but John's singing off is so evocative. That's what I think you gotta do.
here, My Dear, here it is
#8
I like how you started it off with a chorus, it's nice to change things around sometimes one thing I would probably change about the verse is the first line "we met through a friend" I just don't think it flows that well with the song, but to each his own haha. hope this helps
#9
danke prima
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#10
Um. You'd better make it a slow song, like everyone else is saying.
My response to the song is: Well, since you're so convinced that she'll never think of you. Just give up. End the song with how you've gotten over her and you're moving on.

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#11
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Um. You'd better make it a slow song, like everyone else is saying.
My response to the song is: Well, since you're so convinced that she'll never think of you. Just give up. End the song with how you've gotten over her and you're moving on.


yeah its already a slow song
working on the second verse. thats a good idea
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#12
I like it, cept for this part though:
"We met through a friend
Who thought we’d be happy together"
Just feels a bit off. And a minor thing, you misspelled guess
#14
I dislike the first two Lines, very much. The rhyming of For and For, is very failish. Too cliche.
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#15
It is a wee bit cliche, but i can imagine this being a really cool acoustic reggae song for some reason

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#16
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I like it, cept for this part though:
"We met through a friend
Who thought we’d be happy together"
Just feels a bit off. And a minor thing, you misspelled guess


i never spell geuss right. <.< see?
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#17
The first two lines of the chorus remind me of the One I Love by REM so i thought it'd be quite similar to that for the rest of the song, but it's not at all. I like it, I can see where people are going with the acoustic reggae thing. It strikes me as the type of song that'd need quite a powerful singer, like usual reggae or ska.
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#18
Heart felt piece man i would it with a mix of clean and distortion
9.5 outa 10