#1
This is the first song I've ever writen and I want reviews/help if u see something I could change for the better. it has a tune but a cba to write it all out lol


Verse 1
I’ve never felt this way before
I know I’m in love, that’s for sure
And right now about this time

I think you’re hot
But I really got 2 stop
Making me crazy
Nobody really cares, except for me

Pre-chorus
How much time will I spend?
Until this story ends

Chorus
Ending up down this road
I think I will explode
I want you standing here with me

(And there’s) something I admire
Coz my heart is on fire
It was never meant to be

Verse 2
Yeah, you and me, we got history
And there’s something you got 2 know
I know that we can never be

And you could shoot me with an arrow
I would still not ever let go
It’s too bad you can not love me

Pre-chorus
How much time will I spend?
Until this story ends

Chorus
Ending up down this road
I think I will explode
I want you standing here with me

(And there’s) something I admire
Coz my heart is on fire
It was never meant to be

Solo
...

Chorus
Ending up down this road
I think I will explode
I want you standing here with me

(And there’s) something i admire
Coz my heart is on fire
It was never meant to be
#4
Avoid cliches. They are the enemy! Other than that, it's got some potential. "I want you standing here with me," is my favorite line. Very musical lyric. Sounds a little too country for my taste but for all I know its a Reggae song a la the Police...
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