#1
Hey guys.
This is my first post. I'm still getting the hang of using this thing, so I suppose any suggestions or comments on how to use these forums would come in handy.

Anyway, this is a song I wrote in about four or so hours. It's very similar to Meshuggah's style of music.

Please, feel free to give any constructive criticism on the tabs.

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#2
If you were going for Meshuggah, you nailed it. But I feel like you sounded too much like Meshuggah, if you know what I mean.

As a rule, I hate the overly dropped tunings and whatnot, but in the case of Meshuggah-type songs, I can forgive it occasionally.

My main criticism is that I felt that bards 96 and 97 of the lead guitar didn't fit at all. But maybe that would be rectified in an actual recording.

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#3
It's very clear that it's inspired by Meshuggah indeed. I like it, especially the main riff and the lead parts are awesome. I'm wondering how it would sound if it was recorded with real instruments.

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#4
Brilliant!
I really like it. The Meshuggah influence is there for sure.
I really like the leads, with the jazz guitar.
The solo was great too.
The guitars might be a bit repetive, but that's no huge problem if you're planning on having some vocals there.

I don't have much time, but I might give you a more detailed reply later. (Don't count on it)
And I don't have anything I want to be critted on up right now, but I'll tell you when I do.

(Oh, and I see what you did with the name)
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#5
For what my opinion is worth, I enjoyed it. I was not expecting the clean section at all, but I think it is great and fits in seamlessly. Good work!

Drop F sure is a... sludgy tuning!
#6
Indeed, drop F sure is a crap tuning. But when you get that low, the strings become kinda like putty. You can get some really interesting sounds out of pinches and bends, not that I used any of that in this song.
The F octave tuning was what I was trying out, really.

Vocals would help it immensely, I think, as the entire song is based more on really conventional songwriting principles. And, once I've bought copies of EzDrummer, Amplitube and the like, I would probably record all of this myself to see how it sounds.

@valdean, I'm glad someone picked it up. Haha.
#7
Lol at Drop F. Intro was nice, very nice rhythm there. I really liked the Jazz Guitar break. The Drums were pretty good, but I couldn't hear the guitar at all. The there was a part which sounded like a chainsaw. I'm really loving those clean guitar breaks! The Bass Harmony is really nice. Again, chainsaw. Is that why you called it "In the Works"? The Solo was really, really nice. I liked the Bass in the outro. On the whole pretty nice.
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#8
drop F? Id like to see you actually play this and have it sound good. onto my crit, i don't really like meshuggah or this kind of music so ill give you a different veiw. the intro is boring and uninspiring. anyone can add together numbers and write a mathy riff with 2 open strings. at least play some different notes or something. I did like the jazz guitar lead that comes in after that. cool and haunting. other than that i found it boring.

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