I like the begining pertty metal sounding, but the chours kinda killed it. I thought it was going to be a scream song the whole way, but I like the clearer voice, trivium and lots of other popular bands do that in parts of their songs, I think it was like an echo or something that made it sound weird. And the chours didnt flow like the rest of the song did. But I think your onto a great idea right now, I would either make the chours a clean voice, just normal singing, or scream the lyrics, and try to make the chours lyrics flow better.