#1
Yes I am a psychopath.

The title is misleading and it sounds like a heartfelt love song, but it definitely isn't.

Your treachery ends now
Your treachery goes deep down like the blade in your chest
Keeled over
My shoulder
Your corpse's frozen heart
Warms my soul
I lay still, unable to escape your glare
I see you before your final breath
The look of horror; bringing sweet satisfaction to my soul
Your blood runs thick onto my hands
The dream is swept into the walls with your dismembered corpse
I still feel the blood on my hands, glistening; a terrible black
I feel no guilt of this; I feel it was meant to be
And yet your eyes return
Haunting my everything
They burn my corneas and reflect onto my eyelids; there is no escape
Your eyes burn through the fortress of my confidence
Revealing a small creature within the walls; Guilt
It has been awaiting this day since the blade devoured your flesh
Inside my mind it runs rampant; true insanity is now but a breath away
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#2
Bump it.
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#3
I like it. You descibe murder without trying to go over the top and become too shocking. The lyrics are vivid without being disgusting. This sounds similar to Poes "The Tell-Tale Heart", without copying it. This would mak a good metal song.
#5
Thanks guys. I think I have my final draft for the song ^^^^

I think I'll start writing some music now.
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