#1
Another night
another drunk ****er on my couch
Who the **** is in the doorway
Who are you people?
It's all happening again
I've seen this before
It's not going to be long
Before the fighting begins

Puke in my bed and
I'll kick your ****ing ass
Puke in my bed and
I'll kick your ****ing ass
Puke in my bed and
I'll kick your ****ing ass

Late night
Disgust
Drunk fight
Confusion
Just might
Explode

Get the **** out
I owe you nothing
You owe me new sheets
Sure I'll hold your beer
Hold it against your teeth
Of course I have ****ing pillows
They aren't for you, asshat
Cook your own ****ing macaroni
Do want you want
Just don't **** in my room

Puke in my bed and
I'll kick your ****ing ass
Puke in my bed and
I'll kick your ****ing ass
Puke in my bed and
I'll kick your ****ing ass

Late night
Disgust
Drunk fight
Confusion
Just might
Explode
#2
maybe as a hardcore punk song?
this is repetitive and doesnt really go anywhere
i say punk because it seems to embody the sort of rage that a lot of punk channels, but rage is really all this piece has. not even justifiable rage. just drunken stupidity. im not sure what sort of crits you were expecting...
if you want to crit mine, its 'soapbox' in my sig. if you dont, thats cool too.
~b