#1
Verse 1

I try so many times to please you

I try so many times to care

Just can't find the strength anymore to

Want you to see all our flaws together

Verse 2
Yet I can't help but stare at the phone

Waiting for your next call

Just want you to know

Your everything I dream for

Chorus

Your all that I want now

Your all that I can't live without

You should come by sometime

So we can be together

Verse 3

I know I need you

To help me through

All thats happened

Throughout this year

Chorus

Your all that I want now

Your all that I can't live without

You should come by sometime

So we can be together
Last edited by stubbs at Jul 27, 2009,
#2
might sound interesting with no no rhymes in the chorus.
average to me
nice work
c4c.
thanks
#3
Thanks, I thought it was decent but I want great like I want it to be like the ultimate John Mayer type song.
#4
There isn't much rhyme so it'd be pretty rhythm dependant when it came to writing the music.
The lyrics are very self-explanatory which means pretty much anyone could relate to them easily, that's a plus.
It should be very good if you can handle the music side of it.
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#6
What style of music is it going to be?
Quote by AlanHB
Yeah well in special UG land chords = noob, scales = intermediate and modes = advanced. Most users are trying to finish the game on hard because then you get the trophies for noob and intermediate difficulties upon completion anyway.
#7
I am trying for something like John Mayer or Jack Johnson or make it sound like Beautiful by James Blunt.
#9
The only real problem I can find in your piece is the intro, because you if you're saying that there's flaws that you want her to see, wouldn't that imply that you're breaking the relationship/feel depressed? Then suddenly, you switch to perfect boyfriend happiness mode for the rest of the song. It sort of disrupts the flow of mood. I recommend you edit that part, but otherwise, it's an alright song.

C4C?

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