#1
Here's a song I just wrote, inspired by a name of an episode of Lost, Confidence Man.

Confidence Man
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He walks
He talks
Like he's the king of kings
He obligates
He manipulates
Like he's the puppet master
He postpones
He procrastinates
Like he can stop the time

(Chorus)
He is the Confidence Man
Never Giving up
He is the Confidence Man
Never letting up

He wants
He needs
Like he's a bottomless pit
He gets
He wrecks
Like a hurricane
He cries
He calls
Like he's dejected

He is the Confidence Man
Never Giving up
He is the Confidence Man
Never letting up

He is the Confidence Man
Never Giving up
He is the Confidence Man
Never letting up
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I am going to add 6 lines to the verses.
I just realized it's to short.
EDIT: added the 3 lines to each verse.
..I was watching my death.
Last edited by timbit2006 at Jul 30, 2009,
#3
I liked it a lot, especially the first 6 lines, but I feel the chorus needs a little bit of work it just doesnt seem as strong as the rest of the song if you dont mind criting one my pieces there are two links in my sig pick one
#4
Reading this, I can hear a lot of different ways it could be built into a song. It could use a bit more meat, like a bridge or something, but it works, for sure.
#5
Quote by Matt Doreen
Reading this, I can hear a lot of different ways it could be built into a song. It could use a bit more meat, like a bridge or something, but it works, for sure.


I was also thinking a bridge. I need to think about that.
Maybe I'll get some inspiration, from my Vacation I'm going on tomorrow.

EDIT: Maybe from an episode of Seinfeild I'm bringing season 4 of that along with me.
..I was watching my death.
#6
Aha. Ya, the first thing I thought of was Seinfeld when I read this.

But inspiration can come from the strangest places. Best of luck.