#1
(Verse 1)
We were all cute as kids
But when the heart gets going
You show me a side
I could’ve lived without knowing

Just so you know
I thought you were crazy from the start
This being said to the guy who likes
Hanging out at wal mart

(CHORUS)
Well I’m sorry for what I’ve done
But theres no turning back
Don’t even put up a fight
It’s clear you never really gave a ****
9 months never felt so wrong
This is the last call

(Verse 2)
Just so you know
It wasn’t that I was trying to hurt you
Just that I didn’t want to let it all go
Well don’t I feel like a fool

If its any conciliation
Go ahead and sleep well at night
For a guy as compelling, and your gpa the only thing going
I probably wouldn’t have continued a fight

(CHORUS)
Well I’m sorry for what I’ve done
But theres no turning back
Don’t even put up a fight
It’s clear you never really gave a ****
9 months never felt so wrong
This is the last call

(Bridge)
So thanks for savoring that one last call
You couldn’t even tell me in person we were done!
Boy was I wrong
About some guy I thought could ever be the one!

(CHORUS)
Well I’m sorry for what I’ve done
But theres no turning back
Don’t even put up a fight
It’s clear you never really gave a ****
9 months never felt so wrong
This is the last call
#2
This song is pure emotion. I like that it's raw and to the point; it doesn't try to be clever. But you should think about pulling back a little bit because parts of this sound like you're just some whiney 14 year old girl instead of a woman who's been genuinely hurt.
The last two lines of the 1st verse are awkwardly worded, as well.

Overall I like it, but it could be improved.
Crit one of mine? They're in the sig.
I want Super Saiyan abilities
#3
Thanks!! And uh, im actually a guy... i'm gay. Haha We'll see how that works out in the music business. And i do agree. Lines like the 'walmart line' are almost to the point-personal where only the writer can understand. And unfortunately that part does have to be edited ha. And yes i'll definitely review yours. Thanks again.