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My Leaving Song

Chorus
Why so sudden?
I am asked
I’m trying to get away
Away from all this mess
Don’t be stupid and follow me
Don’t leave it all behind
You actually have it good here
A family, a home, a life

Verse
Now I’d hate to bother you
But theres something you should know
Eight days from now
I’ll be moving out of town
Don’t throw me a party
A gala, or a ball
Leave me be, go with the rest
So I may give it my all

Chorus
Why so sudden?
I am asked
I’m trying to get away
Away from all this mess
Don’t be stupid and follow me
Don’t leave it all behind
You actually have it good here
A family, a home, a life

Verse
After four years of chaos
The mistreatment and the blame
I’ve come to realize
That it was just me the whole time
So I think this is a good one
A surefire plan
I’m gonna leave, in a few
Hope everyone forgets my name

Chorus
Why so sudden?
I am asked
I’m trying to get away
Away from all this mess
Don’t be stupid and follow me
Don’t leave it all behind
You actually have it good here
A family, a home, a life

Verse
I’m taking a chance
Going out on a whim
If I ever come back
Please forgive all my sins
That’ll be the day
When I return to my bed
The bed left forgotten
Except for in my head

Chorus

Why so sudden?
I am asked
I’m trying to get away
Away from all this mess
Don’t be stupid and follow me
Don’t leave it all behind
You actually have it good here
A family, a home, a life
Rigz.
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Eastwood Mandocaster
Bugera v55
DigiTech DL8
Boss BD-2
Dean Markley Tuner
Ebow

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#2
ermmm i see the emotion in this piece clearly. but i feel nothing because there is absolutely no metaphor. This piece needs metaphor, imagery, anything to make the reader/listener FEEL what you feel, not just see. I can see what you're doing by reading this piece, but that's like watching a silent film devoid of emotion. With any writing, especially lyrics, you have to make the reader feel how you do. like in the chorus. maybe instead of trying to get away you're "Desperately struggling for escape" with that we know how you feel and can connect. just food for thought.
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