#1
This song started in the lyrics game thread. Let me know what you think.

(Verse)

Sage words in salacious context
You whispered lyrics from The New What's Next
Ebb and Flow, don't let go
I need you now

True lies spewed like a reflex
The word love equates to great sex
Highs and lows, don't let go
I feel you now

(Chorus)
So, just dream, dream, dream and I'll never let you go
But don't wake up 'cause you'll find yourself alone
With empty bottles, a crowded head, and an aching heart.

And I'll sing, sing, sing about the gist of what you said
Wrap a melody around the thoughts ripping through my head
I've got this funny way of tearing girls apart

(Bridge)
You'll always be my lover
But what I needed was a friend
Or maybe just a savior
I hope you get saved in the end
I hope you find your way home

(Chorus 2 more times)
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#2
I like the lyrics, the flow is very good. I (personally) wouldn't repeat 'dream' and 'sing' in the chorus, but that's your choice. The rhyming pattern is also good, it stretches out a bit, but it's alright. Keep on writing, I'd say
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