#1
Hey,

So this is a new song in a hard rock style ( as ever ), the title is I killed my wife. I'm quite proud of it, because it sounds to me like my best work, and I hope i'll play it live with my band .

The lyrics are about an old man who get married with a young women who only wants his money, and one day the old guy kill his wife accidentaly while she was trying to kill him for the legacy. But i didn't sing the lyrics, because my voice really suck If you wanna sing the lyrics for me, tell me.

You can listen to it on my profile :

http://profile.ultimate-guitar.com/flaphead325/music/all/play674168

I would like to know what do you think about it

I do C4C
Last edited by flaphead325 at Aug 5, 2009,
#5
Quote by v2a2n2g2
I'm going to agree with the guy above me. A little sloppy in a lot places. Where you drunk or something while recording this? Nah I kid lol. It would be a pretty fun tune to listen to if it was cleaned up a bit.

Crit mine plzz,
https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1176090


Since i don't drink i would think it's because I suck or maybe something went wrong during recording!
#7
kinda sloppy/meshy sounding. great playing though. i wish you would have sang the lyrics. even if you arent the best singer it would have added allot. and we could have crit'ed the lyrics. anyway it sounds cool. keep it up. i would love to hear this with youre band with the lyrics done and whatnot.

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#8
hey man, thanks for the crit.

"I killed my wife" has some solid energy that definitely grabs your attention, I like the riff that comes in before the 1 minute mark. The drums were definitely off time at one point in the beginning, however. Bass has some nice tone! It would be cool to hear this with vocals too.

All in all, good work!
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#9
Quote by dudebud
hey man, thanks for the crit.

"I killed my wife" has some solid energy that definitely grabs your attention, I like the riff that comes in before the 1 minute mark. The drums were definitely off time at one point in the beginning, however. Bass has some nice tone! It would be cool to hear this with vocals too.

All in all, good work!


When were the drums out of time?

Did you like the solo?
#10
Nice energy in this song! The recording quality is kind of lagging, but the playing isn't half bad at all. The solo is pretty good, just got a little off time in the very beginning of it. I like you're rif***e though! Would definitely sound killer with a cleaner recording and some growly vocals. Maybe not too growly though

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#11
Sloppy sounding, work on getting it tighter. There are a few rythem errors here and there, you could use some more practice overall. But the songwriting isn't bad at all. Its just the excecution that needs work. Keep at it and you'll get alot more attention soon


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#13
Really not bad, have to agree with the others, though.
But has alot of great parts you should really stick with!
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