Nowhere near finished. Just basic so far. Its quite simple, but Im liking what I have.

Ive only really got upto verse 2, all the parts after that are just ideas. Im definately throwing a solo in there.

Any ideas, comments are appreciated
Intro: I like it a lot, really sets the mood for the song.

Verse: Simple, but nice sounding. I love the melody.

Chorus: Sounds great, and with the vocal melody it really comes together. I also love the bass line. Maybe add in an electric guitar to accent the beat.

Bridge: Sounds good, but I think it needs to lead to a solo.

will you please crit mine.
grok it.


Listen to jazz, it's good for you...
I really like what you've got so far.

The only real negative to it is the drums are a little weak sounding in the chorus. They're actually more powerful in the post-chorus.

Other than that though, simple but highly memorable.
Intro: Just sounds awesome.

Verse: I find it rather bland. Nothing "pretty" in it like the intro. Maybe throw in some of that lead magic from the intro.

Chorus: Awesome again. Vocal melody goes very well with the rhythm. Written any lyrics yet?

Bridge: Bar 54 i would like to see a "build-up" from a palm-muted A chord. E.g. 7 7 7 7 7 7 7
5 5 5 5 5 5 5
M M M and then louder etc

Then go back into the chorus without vocals but a solo? I think that would be pretty awesome and then continue the chorus rymthm and bring back the vocals? Get what I'm saying? :P
Last edited by 21Fretter at Aug 5, 2009,