#3
it could use some work. the playing should be cleaner or it might be the recording your vocals need work. the part where you use the wammy sounds a little off. i like the part at 1:15 i think thats pretty cool along with the clean break. just play cleaner and record better. keep it up.
crit mine please https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1177064