#1
this is my second piece of writing, any feedback guys, one question, how do I change my poems into proper songs?

eye to eye we stand
on the boarders of no mans land,
where the remains of the wreckage is left behind to simmer
no hope of reconciliation,nothing, not a glimmer

when i look into yours, as you look in into mine
with fresh pair of eyes that cannot disguise
the demise that defines humanity,
its crimes, its lies, the vanity

the inaudible whispers of the voiceless
the scratched out faces of the timeless
the flaming landscape that reflects in yours
the unyielding spirit of the men of wars

eyes glisten as I reach out my hand
the armour shatters as we reach the promised land.
#2
This is a very beautiful peice of poetry I like it a lot and cannot find anything wrong with it.

one question, how do I change my poems into proper songs?

What do you mean by this?
Do you mean "How can I add chords to this song?"
Or "What would be a good way to sing this?"
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the question is mostly to do with the structure. Ive never written a song before so Im not aware of how many lines it has to be, verses, chorus lenght etc. Is there a thread on this kind of stuff? Plus would you know what genre fits withh the lyrics?
#4
You can pretty much do whatever you want with it, in terms of chords and song structure.

To me, it sounds like an dark acoustic song, I can see it as an Opeth song. It's all based on personal preference though, man.
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#5
Just start using chord progression on through the different lines and wait to see which one sound good.

As for a verse/chorus/bridge you can probably just have all of it (except the last two lines) as verses. And you can have a jam/solo verse between a couple of them to break it up a little. The last two line though you can either keep using the same chord progression and just have some blank space as the end of that verse or you can change the chord progression and play it as the ending of the song.
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