#1
*Keep in mind this is an acoustic song,
and im aware there is no Chours,
but that is just how i like it.
Enjoy.
(:


I'm just a small fish in the sea,
and you're a great big boat.
I struggle to learn how to swim,
and you already know how to float.

And all the creatures of the sea,
swim to you,
and move right past me.
Someday ill be as great as you,
I'll shine in your eyes,
and do all the things you said i couldn't do.

I'll do good, and ill go far.
I'll be famous, I'll be a star.
But you still wont notice me,
with all the fish in the sea.

I'll prove to you that im not the same,
i wont turn back,
i wont play your games,
but ill show you that i love you.
And im not just a fish,
inside this great big blue.
#2
I suggest changing the name to "Find the Hay in the Needle Stack"!
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#3
I like the lyrics, but the title could be better. Nice work though.

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#4
"Needle in a Needlestack" sounds better IMO


Lyrically, very well done.

It's all good.
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#5
Just for the record,
I just kinda made something up for the title.
Because if it was,
"Fish in the Sea."
You guys wouldnt have read it, would you?
#6
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Just for the record,
I just kinda made something up for the title.
Because if it was,
"Fish in the Sea."
You guys wouldnt have read it, would you?

Probably not.
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#8
aw, the lyrics are cuuuuuuute!


it makes me think of 'Boats and Birds" by Gregory and the Hawk.

If you ever record this i'd very much like to hear it
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#9
Cool song, what chords?
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#10
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aw, the lyrics are cuuuuuuute!


it makes me think of 'Boats and Birds" by Gregory and the Hawk.

If you ever record this i'd very much like to hear it


That was the biggest compliment i think ive ever gotten.
(:
that is my favorite song of all time.
and exactly what i was going for.
or a Jeremy Ashida type feel.
#11
Pretty good. Definitely suited for the acoustic style you describe. Could be epic with a well-produced recording, I would put ambient keyboards in the background behind the acoustic chords but that's just me haha. Well done. If I were to criticize any particular part, I would amend the line: "I'll be famous, I'll be a star." I would end with "star," but have less of a cliche line. Something like, "I'll shine bright with my own star." Or something of that nature. Otherwise it's all pretty fluid and musical.
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