#1
fuck you.

a love letter to no one
clicking your fingernails on the tabletop,
and my eyes can't quite calibrate,
when i'm stuttering drunken 'i love you's'
on a line to nowhere and the dial tone
hums me to sleep, and i'm alone
and so unlike you. i was the kid who
told a joke and no one laughed,
but one of these days, you're gonna
say i love you back, and i'm gonna stand up
so damn tall, taller than i've ever been,
and i'm gonna laugh. i'm gonna laugh so damn hard,
and you motherfuckers will get it then,
and you'll laugh too, but it'll be too late.
so keep clicking your damn nails impatiently,
and waiting for a perfect you won't ever find,
i got mine and you'll get yours.
i promise you will.
Last edited by NGD1313 at Aug 16, 2009,
#2
Fuck you too.

Ilu. <3
マリ「しあわっせはーあるいってこないだーからあるいってゆっくんだねーん 
いっちにっちいっぽみーかでさんぽ
 さーんぽすすんでにっほさっがるー 
じーんせいはっわんつー!ぱんち・・・


"Success is as dangerous as failure. Hope is as hollow as fear." - from Tao Te Ching

Last edited by culex-knight at Aug 16, 2009,
#5
Quote by NGD1313
fuck you.

i was the kid who
told a joke and no one laughed
I think people are just too thick to understand my humour.
#6
this made me feel better.
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i suppose there's a chance
i'm just a litte too shallow to consider
that maybe i've been a little more eager
each day to wake up and take a shower
brush my teeth and smile for the mirror
#7
This made me feel better too. Your work always does. You say what I want to say far better than I ever will. Thank you.
#8
I like it, especially the beginning. It loses steam from there, and when you start cussing alot it just kind of lost me. If you toned down the angst, it would be amazing. You overdid the cussing just a bit too much, as well. I liked some of it, but the
so keep clicking your damn nails impatiently,


was just too much.
Today I feel electric grey
I hope tomorrow, neon black
#15
Really enjoyed your peice, very angsty, very honest, very hurt. It made me feel happy and sad all at once. I was just overwhelmed with the possibilities this song has. Maybe tone down the cursing a little bit towards the end, but other than that, kudos.

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#16
this doesn't even count as poetry. this is seriously so stupid. i think i'm having some sort of mental breakdown.
#17
It's just an emotionally intact discharge. Very touching because of this. And very real. And the flow is on top of things as always.

If you feel like bull****ting around and reading one of mine, pt4 was my latest and makes me happy.
Anatomy Anatomy
Whale Blue Review

Park that car
Drop that phone
Sleep on the floor
Dream about me
#18
I think I like it, but I sitll think you could have said it more eloquently. Still nice
Your mother likes it ruff, Trebeck.
#21
I think that the fact that this practically lacks any eloquence and still comes across as excellent writing is the honesty, the emotion, the vocabulary - and most of all, the connectability.

This is really great.