#1
I walked into class that very first day
I fell for you angel,
trust me when I say,
I'm so afraid you don't feel the same,
thanks for making my heart burst aflame

Almost all the time,
love bites me in the face
I think you realize what I've almost done
Your eyes, smile, hair, worn-out jeans and dirty sneaks,
what lengths to go to have you

We could be a musical romance,
If you'd only give me a chance
If you want lets be together forever and ever

All the time,
I've got it for you pretty bad,
your eyes, smile, hair, worn-out jeans and dirty sneaks,
but most of all I like you,
It'd be nice for us to go to a show or two

Almost all the time,
love bites me in the face
I think you realize what I've almost done
Your eyes, smile, hair, worn-out jeans and dirty sneaks,
what lengths to go to have you

Almost all the time,
love bites me in the face
I think you realize what I've almost done
Your eyes, smile, hair, worn-out jeans and dirty sneaks,
what lengths to go to have you
#2
I had only one and glaringly obvious problem with this song: The rhymes were forced. I've done it many times myself and its a easy trap to fall into. However, I can see that you really care about this chick, and I kind of care as well, but I'm just not overwhelmed with emotion. I can relate certaintly, and I need to draw on that to make this song deeper. Also, the line "Your eyes, smile, hair, worn-out jeans and dirty sneaks" was pretty perfect. Great ending.

C4C? Sig.
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#3
Quote by PCADriven
I had only one and glaringly obvious problem with this song: The rhymes were forced. I've done it many times myself and its a easy trap to fall into. However, I can see that you really care about this chick, and I kind of care as well, but I'm just not overwhelmed with emotion. I can relate certaintly, and I need to draw on that to make this song deeper. Also, the line "Your eyes, smile, hair, worn-out jeans and dirty sneaks" was pretty perfect. Great ending.

C4C? Sig.

dude.
Thanks, that line came to me at like midnight a few nights ago
#4
Thanks for the crit. I like this alot, its simple, but genuine and therefore very effective when writing on this kind of topic. I especially like the line 'We could be a musical romance,' it sounds really cool and stands out in the song. Good job.
#5
i really like it if you put the right music to it this song definetly has radio-worthy potential nice job dude!
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