#1
Verse 1
Forgotten thoughts, I cant remember, lost and never said
The information is much to broken, and cant be contained
In my head the words are scrambled I doubt you'll understand
Forget whats said my minds to (Broken) Maybe Even Dead!

(In this neglected place)
(All is laid to waste)

Course
Let pain be just listen
It's burning inside of me
Let hallow thoughts vanish
To find your Salvation with me

Verse 2
So let the thoughts that make u wonder take control
Pass the safe distance and we'll travel to the unknown
To sort out the difference,Scream and come clean
To start your redemption forget...forget Me!

(Have you come to follow)
(Here we die in sorrow)

Course
Let pain be just listen
It's burning inside of me
Let hallow thoughts vanish
To find your Salvation with me

(Its Forgotten...Forgotten...Ahhhhh)
SOLO

(Salvation...Your Forgotten Thoughts are my memories)

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#2
It's a good song but it's meaning is a bit vague...salvation from what? Maybe you'd want to change the song perhaps add a stanza to make it's meaning clearer.
#3
Hey sorry it took so long for me to get to this.

I like how this flowed, and it seems like it would sound good in a heavy song. My only complaint is that it seemed like there were alot of typos, both grammatical and spelling.

But I did like it. If you ever put some music to this let me know
#4
Quote by jbridge90
Hey sorry it took so long for me to get to this.

I like how this flowed, and it seems like it would sound good in a heavy song. My only complaint is that it seemed like there were alot of typos, both grammatical and spelling.

But I did like it. If you ever put some music to this let me know


the way the grammer and the words are in wrong places is the way i wrote the song out hence the "in my head the words are scrambled" i was trying to make an original type of twist thankyou for the crit
#5
Quote by Virtuoso883
It's a good song but it's meaning is a bit vague...salvation from what? Maybe you'd want to change the song perhaps add a stanza to make it's meaning clearer.


its a salvation from straight thinking, perfect grammer, being like every one else
well thats what i was trying to get out