#1
I have a new song, it's called Scratching the Surface. It can be found in my profile.

Lyrics:
All these voices
Scratching the Surface
Trying to get me
Try to get me

All these voices
Very unnerving
Got to get away
Got to get away

No, No, No I won't let you take me
No, No, No I won't let you take me
No, No, No I won't let you take me
No, No, No I won't let you take me

All these voices
Messing with my head
They tell me what to do
Tell me what to do

All these voices
Break through the surface
Got to get away
Got to get away

No, No, No I won't let you take me
No, No, No I won't let you take me
No, No, No I won't let you take me
No, No, No I won't let you take me

Faith, fate, what good did they ever do?
They did nothing for me.

Criticism/comments on any/all aspects of the song would be appreciated.
I wrote a song about war...
The kind that lives in your head.
#2
Crit as playing
The intro is interesting but only for so long, i would shorten it a little and the transition into the chords is just slightly off. the vocals could use a little reverb i think, and possibly a little more energy on the chorus but thats just my opinion. there is a lot of dead time (with no vocals) i would try and shorten that a little bit personally due to the short attention span of many listeners. Dont get me wrong though, although there are many adjustments needed it is still a pretty well done song.


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