#1
Another Disbelief song, this time not in the tabs because I don't have it fully tabbed yet.

It's in D Major, classic rock with progressive influences. Enjoy.



I have succeeded,
In pushing the whole world away.
Today is a brand new day,
To start my life over,
Again.

I look out,
Over the trees and the cities.
This is the life that I'm leading now,
Alone at last,
With nobody left to complain.

In my heart my lust is growing,
Never seeing never knowing,
What will be and what will not,
My life is led by what I haven't got.

Never defeated,
By the cold touch of love.
And untreated and ignored,
By the cold hand above.

My choice is simple,
Live and let live alone.
Led easily,
By sins for which,
I can not atone.

Free to go into the world around me,
Hunting everything I ever wanted.
This is my time to shine.

Free to make the path with only one ending,
And live the life no one is comprehending.
To go out with a bang.

In my heart my lust is growing,
Never seeing never knowing.
Everything got in the way and,
Now it's gone there's only one to pay.

No influence,
From the outside world.
No illusion,
No confusion.
I have tried this road a thousand times,
Every time,
I am led astray.

It's my time,
It's my place,
To face,
My own fate.

There's no other way.

It's my time,
It's my place,
So get out of,
My face.

Free to go into the world around me,
Hunting everything I ever wanted.
This is my time to shine.

Free to make the path with only one ending,
And live the life no one is comprehending.
To go out with a bang.

I have tried so many other ways,
They all end the same.

Life is never forgiving,
It's repetitive strain.

I ease into a world of reality,
Selfish on the outside,
And inside not to see.

To go out with a bang.

In my heart my lust is growing,
Never seeing never knowing.
Everything got in the way and,
Now it's gone there's only one to pay.

It's my time,
It's my place,
To face,
My own fate.

There's no other way.

It's my time,
It's my place,
So get out of,
My face.

I will go out with a bang.
#2
I really like it- how the lines become shorter and snappier at the end, climaxing with 'I will go out with a bang', too. It's interesting graphologically, too- it resembles waves, like the ups and downs in a relationship.

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#3
sweet, can't wait to see the tabs, been following disbelief for day and thought it'd be cool to hear how thrill seeking went.
#4
It's comprehendable without being simple. Not so sure about the 'so get out of, my face' (seems too 'rap' for the rest of the song, but I wouldn't know, as I haven't heard it.). But I like it's equivalent 'to face, my own fate'. And 'to go out with a bang' and 'there's no other way' give it a sort of force (which is good).

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#5
my problem with this was there was absolutely no progression with the character. In terms of a piece of writing it seemed like I was reading the same stanza over and over again, the same repetitive feeling, and not in a good way. As a song I'm sure you've done a great job with it and it is definitely solid, but reading it as lyrics it bored the heck out of me. Ultimately, I had no sympathy or hatred for the character, and really didnt care what he was going to do with his life.
#6
It's pretty solid, but I would definitely say that some of this could be omitted for redundancy... the overall tone is very consistent, but that's probably the point as it is a declaration by the protagonist explaining his transcendence, or whatever. I would maybe just clean it up a bit. Lots of songs repeat the same lyric over and over, but as this is a heavy prog song a la Dream Theater, etc., you could do with taking some of those extra bits out, and instead implying them by their previously accompanying melodies. A great example of this is Tool's song Vicarious with the lyric "Why don't you just admit it?" ... They have a specific riff/rhythm that accompanies the line, then the rhythm repeats without the vocals, therefore in your mind the lyrics linger, implied by the music.
"Life was such a wheel that no man could stand upon it for long.
And it always, at the end, came round to the same place again."

- Stephen King, The Stand