#1
I’m broken and defeated
Feeling so down
I reach out my hand in desperation
But there’s not a soul around

I’m just so tired
Of breaking up and breaking down
Won’t you just come back to town?
I’m begging you

Give me a reason to change
Cover up my scars with a band-aid
And take away all this pain
I just want someone to make me right

Needles and broken bottles
Scattered on the floor
It seems I had too much that day
And you just couldn’t take anymore

Yes I was wrong
And yes I wronged you
But we belong together
Please come back to me

Give me a reason to change
Cover up my scars with a band-aid
And take away all this pain
I just want someone to make me right

Yes I know it won’t be easy
But I’m it for the long run
Second chances don’t come easy
But I feel like I deserve one

Cause I’m so tired
Of waking up on the edge of town
In my broken down pick up truck
I don’t deserve this

Give me a reason to change
Cover up my scars with a band-aid
And take away all this pain
I just want someone to make me right
#2
I think you could or worked more along the lines of the title -- in that, dead-like phrases could really help envelop the reader inside a zone of unresponsiveness and mind concavity.
You're totally battered and bruised and your verbal abilities feel likewise. Show that; lose the rhymes and the fluidity and just write about vigour disappearing, and how everything is bringing you down.
Don't use your words so much to make a point, use the way in which those are spoken to make a point.
#3
Thanks for the advice, I don't want to make it too rough though cuz it is a pop song afterall.