#1
C4C
Anything underlined has a backing vocalist also singing it.
As far as style and genre, I see it bearing similarities to Nirvana and Blink-182.

[Verse 1]
Made of plastic, with painted doll eyes;
drawn with care not to blink when they lie.
Pseudo-silk still feels so smooth;
and when it's worn, it tends to soothe.

I know, yeah I know,
yeah I know, I don't know.
I know, yeah I know,
yeah I know, I don't know.


The real picture's, sad but true;
it was really painted in Van Gogh's blues.
Shades of red, to illustrate rage;
mix into purple, then fade into gray.

[Chorus 1]
I know;
I know you feel like ****, yeah
I know;
I know you feel like it's, not worth it.

Nothing's perfect;
but it seems pretty ****ing close from down here.
Yeah it's clear;
you don't really care, what I know.

[Verse 2]
Looking back, at what we've built;
looking back, I'm filled with guilt.
I need to relax, I need to chill,
I need your arms, I need a pill.

I know, yeah I know,
yeah I know, I don't know.
I know, yeah I know,
yeah I know, I don't know.


Part the sea by hand, just for a smile;
please sit back, it'll take awhile.
You'll be crushed, if you don't believe;
believe what they say, or you'll get beat.

[Chorus 2]
I know;
I know you feel like ****, yeah
I know;
I know you feel like it's, not worth it.

Nothing's perfect;
but it seems pretty ****ing close from down here.
Yeah it's clear;
you don't really care, what I know.

[Verse 3]
Made of plastic, with painted doll eyes;
drawn with care not to blink when they lie.
Pseudo-silk still feels so smooth;
and when it's worn, it tends to soothe.

I know, yeah I know,
yeah I know, I don't know.
I know, yeah I know,
yeah I know, I don't know.


I know, yeah I know,
yeah I know, I don't know.
I know, yeah I know,
yeah I know, I don't know.


I know, yeah I know,
yeah I know, I don't know.
I know, yeah I know,
yeah I know, I DON'T KNOW!


[Chorus 3]
I know;
I know you feel like ****, yeah
I know;
I know you feel like it's, not worth it.

Nothing's perfect;
but it seems pretty ****ing close from down here.
Yeah it's clear;
you don't really care, what I know.
#2
Quote by herby190
C4C
Anything underlined has a backing vocalist also singing it.
As far as style and genre, I see it bearing similarities to Nirvana and Blink-182.

[Verse 1]
Made of plastic, with painted doll eyes;
drawn with care not to blink when they lie.
Pseudo-silk still feels so smooth;
and when it's worn, it tends to soothe.

I like the rhymes so far, and I love the imagery.

I know, yeah I know,
yeah I know, I don't know.
I know, yeah I know,
yeah I know, I don't know.


Cliche, but so are most choruses.

The real picture's, sad but true;
it was really painted in Van Gogh's blues.
Shades of red, to illustrate rage;
mix into purple, then fade into gray.

Great imagery here.

[Chorus 1]
I know;
I know you feel like ****, yeah
I know;
I know you feel like it's, not worth it.

Nothing's perfect;
but it seems pretty ****ing close from down here.
Yeah it's clear;
you don't really care, what I know.

I feel like your throwing the same thing at me again.

[Verse 2]
Looking back, at what we've built;
looking back, I'm filled with guilt.
I need to relax, I need to chill,
I need your arms, I need a pill.

Second line seems kind of forced, the rest is solid.

I know, yeah I know,
yeah I know, I don't know.
I know, yeah I know,
yeah I know, I don't know.


Part the sea by hand, just for a smile;
please sit back, it'll take awhile.
You'll be crushed, if you don't believe;
believe what they say, or you'll get beat.

This seemed really forced, and the last line was too cliche.

[Chorus 2]
I know;
I know you feel like ****, yeah
I know;
I know you feel like it's, not worth it.

Nothing's perfect;
but it seems pretty ****ing close from down here.
Yeah it's clear;
you don't really care, what I know.

[Verse 3]
Made of plastic, with painted doll eyes;
drawn with care not to blink when they lie.
Pseudo-silk still feels so smooth;
and when it's worn, it tends to soothe.

I know, yeah I know,
yeah I know, I don't know.
I know, yeah I know,
yeah I know, I don't know.


I know, yeah I know,
yeah I know, I don't know.
I know, yeah I know,
yeah I know, I don't know.


I know, yeah I know,
yeah I know, I don't know.
I know, yeah I know,
yeah I know, I DON'T KNOW!


[Chorus 3]
I know;
I know you feel like ****, yeah
I know;
I know you feel like it's, not worth it.

Nothing's perfect;
but it seems pretty ****ing close from down here.
Yeah it's clear; you don't really care, what I know.


This is one of those songs I can here playing in my head when I read it, nice job

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#3
Quote by herby190
C4C
Anything underlined has a backing vocalist also singing it.
As far as style and genre, I see it bearing similarities to Nirvana and Blink-182.

[Verse 1]
Made of plastic, with painted doll eyes;
drawn with care not to blink when they lie.
Pseudo-silk still feels so smooth;
and when it's worn, it tends to soothe.

I like this a lot. The flow is beautiful and the rhymes are natural. I am drawn in! Woo, this is exciting.

I know, yeah I know,
yeah I know, I don't know.
I know, yeah I know,
yeah I know, I don't know.


Ugh. Really? A stupid, idiotic, useless chorus that tells us NOTHING? What happened to the awesome verse before this? I'll tell you what, it vanished beneath the cloud of mediocrity that arose from this terrible chorus. Fix it.

The real picture's, sad but true;
it was really painted in Van Gogh's blues.
Shades of red, to illustrate rage;
mix into purple, then fade into gray.

I'm iffy, but fine, with the first line. The second kind of baffled me. The third was also iffy, but fine, and then the last was not so good. This piece is getting worse after such a promising first verse.

[Chorus 1]
I know;
I know you feel like ****, yeah
I know;
I know you feel like it's, not worth it.

Giving the audience more, but it still isn't enough. Still a ****ty chorus.

Nothing's perfect;
but it seems pretty ****ing close from down here.
Yeah it's clear;
you don't really care, what I know.

Ugh.

[Verse 2]
Looking back, at what we've built;
looking back, I'm filled with guilt.
I need to relax, I need to chill,
I need your arms, I need a pill.

Getting better. The flow's good, but the rhymes aren't so natural.

I know, yeah I know,
yeah I know, I don't know.
I know, yeah I know,
yeah I know, I don't know.


Ugh.

Part the sea by hand, just for a smile;
please sit back, it'll take awhile.
You'll be crushed, if you don't believe;
believe what they say, or you'll get beat.

Everything here is good, but the last line.

[Chorus 2]
I know;
I know you feel like ****, yeah
I know;
I know you feel like it's, not worth it.

Ugh.

Nothing's perfect;
but it seems pretty ****ing close from down here.
Yeah it's clear;
you don't really care, what I know.

Ugh.

[Verse 3]
Made of plastic, with painted doll eyes;
drawn with care not to blink when they lie.
Pseudo-silk still feels so smooth;
and when it's worn, it tends to soothe.

Great.

I know, yeah I know,
yeah I know, I don't know.
I know, yeah I know,
yeah I know, I don't know.


I know, yeah I know,
yeah I know, I don't know.
I know, yeah I know,
yeah I know, I don't know.


I know, yeah I know,
yeah I know, I don't know.
I know, yeah I know,
yeah I know, I DON'T KNOW!


[Chorus 3]
I know;
I know you feel like ****, yeah
I know;
I know you feel like it's, not worth it.

Nothing's perfect;
but it seems pretty ****ing close from down here.
Yeah it's clear;
you don't really care, what I know.


This has a ton of potential... but only if you get rid of the ton of stuff I don't like. Sorry man, but after the first verse I was really disappointed. If you could crit:

This: https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1191690

or this: https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1192297

I'd appreciate it.