I wrote this poem some time ago and thought I'd post it up to get some response on it. I'm not a serious poet, neither am I a huge poetry fan, but I do write at times when I feel like I need to get my emotions out on something other than a song. CRIT 4 CRIT guys, cheers!


And I know you would be tempted to go astray,
in the new land of mist and cloudy perceptions,
but I trust your sublime inhibitions,
those very identical to the ones you held against me,
in both darkness and sun-bathed mornings,
you were beautiful,
but never did your smile look free

Yet I know you can go astray,
because your tender lips are seen by all,
and a glance of your distinct blue eyes,
would move trees and hearts of men,
but I still trust your divine inhibitions,
and I believe no shadow can break past them

I don't mean what I write in my posts.So don't argue back on it,and don't check me..Because,though I don't mean them,they are the only way I can increase my post count.
Hey man, could you please read through the rules for this forum. Specifically regarding posting limits and thread titles. Once you do you'll know why I've closed this thread. If you want me to delete this thread so you can repost it at another time then let me know.