#1
i'm really not too sure about this one, but ah well. crits are welcome.

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i tell you
that you look great today
you smile and say thanks
but you still walk away

maybe we have a future
even though we've had a past
but there's just one thing
that wouldn't make it last

so who am i
to judge what's on the outside
when it's the only thing
that's beautiful about you

there's nothing i can do
to change your mind
cause all that it's filled with
is you

you can flaunt it all you want
unbutton your shirt
and let your tattoo
glide nicely above your waist
cause it's the only thing
that reminds me of what you are

i'd ask you out to dinner
but you might just say no
cause i don't have the money
and wouldn't pick you up
in a jet black limo

you're difficult to please
you wouldn't marry a guy
if he only got on his knees
he has to pay the money
the price must be fair
to make he sure he asks you
with a balloon in the air

so who am i
to judge what's on the outside
when it's the only thing
that's beautiful about you

there's nothing i can do
to change your mind
cause all that it's filled with
is you
#2
i have issues with this. you start out saying how you could have a future with this girl, which is what i assume you want, but the rest of the piece is condemning her for being shallow and self-involved. and the condemnations are so strong, i don't understand how you would want any kind of relationship with someone you're so adamantly disapproving of. is it only because she's beautiful? if so, you're no better than her.

i guess what i'm saying is this piece is either very contradictory or very hypocritical, neither of which are good things. just something to think about...
when birds flap their wings do the make believe they're really arms?
#3
well it's really about what i think alot of guys have experienced. we'll chase after a girl with full knowing that she's a spoiled bitch, but we really don't care cause on the outside they're beautiful.
#4
So you're basically agreeing with Hope's Downfall that this song is about guys being shallow? Well, I guess that works. There are some lines that are awkward... You should definitely consider changing the second stanza:

I thought we had a future
I know we've had a past
But there is just one problem
That wouldn't make it last
<<My lyric. Critique, please?

You can't change the world but you can make a dent.
#5
yeah, pretty much.

and thanks, i'll try to figure out a better stanza.