#1
It's been a while since i've written, but this should explain where i've been.

Study my image through the rainy glass
Finger the door knob that allows only a breath
Come inside to my fantasy land
Ready to feed the hunger beneath your skin

The barren white walls that raise my awareness
Slurred words to me as I shake vigorous
Underneath my surface bites paranoia
Gets me high so I can feel chimera

Sorry to say you don’t seem to blend in
With this sad face and purity of tan toned skin
Stroke the moxie that leaves my muscles sore
Look me in the eye that has never seen a soft light before

Another selfish deed done
Another long night alone
Leave me feeling dry and prone
When the moon descends we are one

I never came close to soak up your soul
Curtains pulled close, truth lies in my bed
Should I be involved with a mystery this old
Have you any memory of what I said
#2
Nice i enjoyed reading but it's not lyrics its a poem.
nice read though.not brilliant but easy to read POETRY.
Would be nice to here a song from you.
Waiting for a song....
#3
Quote by stereofidelic

Study my image through the rainy glass
Finger the door knob that allows only a breath
Come inside to my fantasy land
Ready to feed the hunger beneath your skin
This could be nice if the prose didn't seem awkward. Glass isn't rainy. Maybe some other word for that? The 'doorknob that allows only a breath' is odd. Last two lines seem okay, if not a little corny.

The barren white walls that raise my awareness
Slurred words to me as I shake vigorous
Underneath my surface bites paranoia
Gets me high so I can feel chimera
The first two lines are just sentence fragments that lead to nowhere. You might want to remedy that. 'Chimera', as far as I'm aware, is a noun, so I don't think you can use it like that. Also, the rhyme seems forced.

Sorry to say you don’t seem to blend in
With this sad face and purity of tan toned skin
Stroke the moxie that leaves my muscles sore
Look me in the eye that has never seen a soft light before
This seems rather cryptic. Nice! But, er, cryptic.

Another selfish deed done
Another long night alone
Leave me feeling dry and prone
When the moon descends we are one
I like these lines.

I never came close to soak up your soul
Curtains pulled close, truth lies in my bed
Should I be involved with a mystery this old
Have you any memory of what I said
Maybe 'came close to soaking up your soul' might fit better. The 'Curtains pulled close' line doesn't quite fit to me.
Needs a little work, but it's good!
<<My lyric. Critique, please?

You can't change the world but you can make a dent.
#4
Thanks guys, basically the poem describes how I let a guy (hook up) into my life and he how it felt, but that i dont want to be in an open relationship.

The white walls line stand for my appartment complex, that make me dizzy because i cant tac anything on the walls so its like infinite space. Never got a chance to get to really know him/never came clos eto soaking up your soul.

Chimera=courage, courage to overcome my feelings for him.

And i've definitely written a handful of lyrics, you can find them in my signature. Thanks again.