#1
Hi, I'm new here. Here's a song I wrote, because my friend dare me to write a song about banning the lollipops the attendent hand out at banks. It also doubles with some other, more personal metaphors. Here's my attempt:

Ever wonder,
when your thoughts be aplunder,
What goes on,
In the down under?

Go to the bank,
They tell you "Everything's all ok"
You don't trust,
It is something you cannot.

They hand you a pop,
Sure, it may seem,
Beautiful, like a dream.
But, in the down under it has
evil thoughts aplunder.

Those, pops of yours,
you see,
Control your thoughts, your mind, and
your knees.
They Stop your thoughts,
Ruin what you bought,
and brainwash every last,
thought in your mind.

STOP THE POP!
(got $2 bills, in my right pocket)
STOP THE POP!
(got $2 bills, in my right-pocket)
STOP THE POP!
(got $2 bills, in my right-pocket)

*beat box*
*organ solo*

CONTROLLING ME!
B-B-B-B-B-RAINWASH
CONTROLLING ME!
B-B-B-B-B-B-BRAINWASH
CONTROLLING ME!
B-B-B-B-B-B-BRAINWASH

The Coporate shades,
Of Capitol crusades,
Take all my monies,
And my political honies

Steal away the cash,
When I lock my door.
Monitor the vault
as the faucet shuts off.

They try to steal my thoughts,
but I won't let them steal my brain,
with no weapon, of any choice.
But a cherry-flavored raspberry choke.

STOP THE POP!
(got $2 bills, in my right pocket)
STOP THE POP!
(got $2 bills, in my right-pocket)
STOP THE POP!
(got $2 bills, in my right-pocket)

#2
Amusing, love the message behind it. I don't exactly see the direct relation between their lollipops and corporate conspiracy, but... well, whatever works, right? :P
<<My lyric. Critique, please?

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