To be honest, there's nothing wrong at all with your playing, but the whole thing sounds a bit cobbled together. There isn't too much flow in the song. Again, your playing is fine and the riffing is good, but for these kinds of songs the flow is really important. Your abrupt stopping kind of takes away from it, but your onto something. Get some drumming in that asap and it'll be sounding much better. Your tone is also pretty good, although you could stand to raise your recording volume a little bit. Your rhythm guitar tone is dying to be compressed!

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