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Growing weary of the turns and tides
of common life and angels singing
in white, with blond tresses
and soft blushing cheeks
in the sun, the sun, the sun
THE SUN IS NOT RIGHTEOUS
TO FIND TRUTH IS NOT TO SHED LIGHT

into the darkness i crawl
unaware of any glimmer to be caught by the eye
fingers in mud, soft and wet
blessed with the eternal love of earth
the metallic smell of clay sinking into pores
the world is blue gray but image is not essential...
image is not essential
to the mind
only the cold

goosebumps on my scalp

chills into my nerves

new moon angels blowing kisses of blue
how does blue feel? how does blue smell?
who is in the sky and why does he need
to spread the world over the cosmos
like a nevending blanket of blue?
spangled with glimmering bits of dust
unthinkable in size
no
no
the world needs no image
only the burning flesh of
distant suns


NEW MOON DEMONS BITING FANGS OF BLUE
soft blushing fangs of blue
curly blond demon tresses
shining brilliant in the sun, but
the sky
is not blue
the sky is
nothing
space is
nothing
time is
nothing
only tricks of perception
tricks of the eye.


ots. im sick as **** ****ing fever dshgjlkasl
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#2
I love this, a lot. It's so spontaneous and dynamic, with the capitalizations and the small text, and the flowing-downwards line breaks to the end, which made me feel like the poem is vanishing to a concluding point.

sorry, you probably want a real critique
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#3
^ Nah, that was sufficient and nice, thank you I really dont remember my thought process while writing this so I'm glad someone enjoyed it
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it's official, vintage x metal is the saving grace of this board and/or the antichrist




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minterman22
tateandlyle
& alaskan_ninja