#1
Alright,
this one i wrote a few days ago,
i havent quite finished it all,
all thats finished is the first verse and the chorus.
i have two breakdowns because i dont know which one to use =]
Positive Crit would be much appreciated.
share your thoughts.
CHEERS!!
-Luke


Verse 1
call the doctor,
tell him i'm okay,
cause i hear them saying,
that they want me to stay,
the pain,
is cutting me like knives,
laying awake with blood shot eyes,
i can see them,
(heading straight for me)


Chorus
I'll make it,
I'm OK,
So save yourself the trouble.
i'll find out,
new ways to,
keep these secrets from you


Verse 2
you're an elegant crime,
waiting for the kind of virtue,
that will make you decide,
what you're gonna do

Breakdown???
and i'll whisper,
"the sun will tear right through this cloudy,
day of yours,
isn't this like what you wished for?"


Breakdown??
(so lay down),
close your eyes,
(until the sun comes out),
and later on.
(you can believe),
i did this for you.
(I DID THIS FOR YOU)