#1
Heyy I've never posted on here, this is the first son I've written. I was looking for a soft acoustic feel for this song. Feel free to criticize and tear this apart... Here it is:


Tonight can be the rest of our lives
So let it happen till morning arrives
And if we don't, let our love survive
Let our memories be saved in time
I'll love you till the day that I die
And if that is sooner than I think
We better not take the time to blink
Cuz with you it seems time flies
And as we lay here staring at the skies
Babe, you make the sun rise

I can't see one star in the sky
That, compare to you, would still shine
And even through the pain and lies
You will still be great in my eyes
I hope this is written in ink
Cuz if it fades, I must rethink
My way to make me different then the other guys
Cuz girl everyday with you is a suprise
Babe, you make the sun rise
#2
Who can take a sunrise
Sprinkle it in dew
Cover it in chocolate
and a miracle or two?

The candyman
The candyman can
The candyman can cause he mixes it with love and makes the world taste good


This is what I thought of when I saw the Header.
No offense meant, but both yours, and willies are kinda cliche.... but I'm no writer, so disregard my comments.