#1
so i have had this riff for awhile and i've never been totally satisfied with it until now. I want to know if you people like it because i still am having a hard time telling if it works.

c4c?
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#2
It certainly has potential. Judging by the rest of your stuff, It could be pretty awesome, but personally I think the drum part you have down is holding it back.

The constant crash makes the whole thing drag, imo. I'm not suggesting you have too much cymbal going on, I just think you could be slightly more intricate and give the riff a real boost at the same time.

Its short though, so I'm sorry I don't have much to say other than the above

Oh on seconds thoughts, a second guitar part and some bass would also probably stop you getting that so-so feeling about the whole things. Perhaps. lol I dunno.

Just mess around with it, throw some odd ideas at it, see what happens.
#3
thanks man, i am just having trouble getting it to groove. Lots of the things i write don't always groove naturally but i write them thinking of a simple drum beat. Like this was written to basically a 6/8 feel. The only measure i really know i want to keep is measure 3 because i like how the guitar and drums are off from each other and then come back together on the low open C, i think it makes it heavier that way ha.

cheers though ill work out some other drum stuff
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#4
I can't give you a crit properly.. but I'll provide you with some ideas for the drums, soon.
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#5
im pretty set on the drum parts in measures 3 and at least the first half of 4 but the first two measures of the riff i just dont know what to do ha
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First of all, I enjoy deathcore for it's complexity and it's the only genre heavy enough for me



Quote by Highway60Bob
I want an amp good for playing hippie tunes. I want it to be an actual amp, not a tube amp.
#6
Mind if I create a completely new drums track?
It might inspire you or something.
Or just take what you need then. ;D
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#7
This is quite the opposite of your track, I think.
Maybe it's of no use for you. ;D
But in case you take it as a constructive crit, can you crit back on my song "Dissolving Harmonies.." or at least take a look? (:
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Holy shit nemesis, that was depressing.
Mission accomplished!