#1
Yeah, so I'm having a bit of trouble with this song, I have the idea I want for it already down, but I'm having a bit of writers block with makeing it more original than what I got so far. 140 BPM is really hard to make up stuff for, and I'm not able to play lead at 140 BPM, not that fast yet.

I need some help with this, I need reccomendations on how to change it up and what kind of lead I should do, cause I cant think of anything at the moment. The drum track cant change, I know it sucks, but I cant change it.

Plus, how does it sound so far? To muddy, to fast, to boring?

I will C4C if you request it.

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#2
Just a bit muddy.

Make a lead in diminished or harmonic minor.
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#3
I think its a little to muddy. I really love the part from 0:44 to about 0:58 its just a little to choppy for my ears though, If you smoothed it out just a little It would be great. Other than those things its really good, its heavy, low, and pretty fast good work!
#4
i like it...its got a unique sound id say which is great...better then most of the genric sounding riffs out there...im liking the part around 1 minute...pretty baisc but id say its pretty sick...you should try addin some vocals
#5
Thanks guys, I dont know what it means to play in a dimished or harmonic minor, but I do know the song is in some sort of minor key. I just looked at my pedal, and its got a low battire, so thats prolly why its so muddy, I'll get that changed out and rerecord the song later on. I kinda stole 4 notes from the main riff from Chevelles Family system, but I changed the riff completly put it in a lower tuning, and made it 10 times faster. lol. I hope thats not musical plagurism.
#6
This would be pretty cool background music for something like a video game intro or whatnot.

For me it was a mix of really muddy and really choppy. Sometimes it just sounded mushed together and then, maybe, you over-corrected. Cool song - I don't think the drums are too shabby anyways.
#7
I wasn't sure if that sort of constant fading in and out effect on the guitar was intentional or caused by something else but it actually worked really well!

I think for an instrumental just on it's own it needed a bit more variation in there. What I mean is, for example, when a riff/section comes back later in the song make it slightly different than the last time. This could even mean changing the drum beat a bit, making it more relaxed or more intense sounding. Or maybe throw a few palm mutes in to chop it up a bit.

Are you in a band or something? I really feel with vocals this would make a great song.
#8
you don't have to have play your solo to the tempo of the song. maybe a few string noises feedback bend a few long notes harmonics dive bomb if you can. try to build atmosphere up with your guitar and by all means throw a few quick runs in. all i'm saying is you solo can work slow or fast. i think. lol
i don't think i've been much help. othere than the odd mashing sound coming through, it sounded pretty good.
#9
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I wasn't sure if that sort of constant fading in and out effect on the guitar was intentional or caused by something else but it actually worked really well!

I think for an instrumental just on it's own it needed a bit more variation in there. What I mean is, for example, when a riff/section comes back later in the song make it slightly different than the last time. This could even mean changing the drum beat a bit, making it more relaxed or more intense sounding. Or maybe throw a few palm mutes in to chop it up a bit.

Are you in a band or something? I really feel with vocals this would make a great song.


Lol, not it was intentional, when you hit the the b and sometimes e string while struming a bar chord with lots of distortion it will give a slight in and out effect.

No, I'm not in a band, well, I was in my church band for a time.

I cant really change the drum beat because its a pre recorded track. I dont have drum software so I have to use tracks.

But thanks for the feedback guys, I think on the second verse 2 I'm going to change it up a bit, then try to make a heavy outro. I'll see what I can do with divebombs, I dont have my tremlo set up for Drop A#, its still set up for .10 standard tuning. But I'll work on that today.
#11
At least your doing something different, it sounded like the guitar cut out when you stopped a little bit, but it sounds great. The part at like 50 seconds reminds me of Dream Theater. I think the wavey guitar sound could go and it would sound great mate. C4C?

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#12
Listening now... Pretty repetitive riff.... What's going on with the guitars? It sounds as if there is buffering problems and it keeps going in and out. Not a fan.

A crit? It's pretty boring. Not gonna lie. Same riff, same drum pattern then ENTIRE song....Throw in a bridge somewhere and maybe mix up the rhythm here or there. I know you said you can't change the drum track, but try. I basically heard the same thing for 3 minutes. It's pretty muddy. Like I said, not sure what's goin on w/the guitar sound :/.

The chord progression sounds good, just needs some work done to it. Not a bad idea to work off of though. I kinda hear a little rage influence somewhere in there.

crit? https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1200021
#13
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At least your doing something different, it sounded like the guitar cut out when you stopped a little bit, but it sounds great. The part at like 50 seconds reminds me of Dream Theater. I think the wavey guitar sound could go and it would sound great mate. C4C?

http://www.purevolume.com/Remnants11475 (50 Second Test)



Thanks, Its just an idea, I dont know if I'll try to finish it because the drum track is repetitive, and its pertty simple, I dont think I'm ready to play at a 140 BPM. And I guess my recoding equipment is not good enough to keep it from mudding up.

But I listened to your song and it sounds pertty cool, reminded me of a AC/DC kinda riff in minor key. I would be interested to see where you take it.
#14
Hi Ethan,

I'm new here so yours is the first song I've listened to. Very good job overall!

You are asking for suggestions to help you out of the writers block. I would suggest that you change the tempo (and possibly the key) for a section of the song where you could put a solo in. This would allow the listener a chance to anticipate the return to the blistering metal rif***e. Absence makes the heart grow fonder.

Great job!
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