#1
this is my first lyric posted here on UG so positive/negative feedback is very welcomed. Much appreciated if you take the time to read this:

The basic idea is that there are going to be 3 songs each based off of the Black Waltz's from the video game Final Fantasy 9. This is the first installment:

Black Waltz No. 1: Existence Is A Strange Bird
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[verse]
Upon opening these eyes
I determined that I was
Unlike those around me
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Instantly utilized
For the value of my capabilities
I was born a beast
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Command acknowledged
My mission clear
I'm coming to save you Princess
And return you safely here

[pre-chorus]
Only one purpose
Existing to fulfill the wishes of others
Am I alone?

[chorus1]
Why didn't you fall asleep?
You should've been dead by now
Had things gone according to plan
You'd have been a dead man
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But you're not
It's time to teach you a thing or two
Welcome to the blizzard of your own self destruction

[verse2]
Upon closing these eyes
I feel the cold of death's
Fingers wrapping around me
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Instanly cast aside
And replaced by whose next in line
I was killed a waste
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Forgive me my masters
Mission unsuccessful
The princess still roams free
She carries on, unlike me

[pre-chorus]
Only one purpose
Existing to fulfill the wishes of others
Was I ever alone?

[chorus2]
Why didn't I fall asleep?
I should've been dead by now
Had things gone according to plan
I wouldn't be a dead man
-
But you are
It's time to learn a thing or two
Accepting this tragic fate as your own termination

[breakdown]
If everything is predetermined in this world then how the hell is life
So f*cking unpredictable?
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#2
bump...

I will C4C whoever crits mine.
im just in need of some helpful opinions. thanks in advance
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Quote by RU Experienced?
Sorry man, I only know how to program in Db.

Quote by genghisgandhi
I'm so underground that I make up bands and songs in my head and don't tell anyone about them.
#3
I never played FF 9, but man this looks epic. It's like some battle hymn, I really liked it.