a lot simpler than what i usually write, especially in terms of structure, but i think it's a nice little song. check out my too. i think it's much better than this one.

I just want to sleep forever.

Last edited by Grovermans at Sep 22, 2009,
After that rather rough comment you left me, I'd like to say this piece was garbage, but that would be lying.

This is a really solid piece of music. I'm a fan of the use of 7ths and what not in your song and I like how you tie the intro/verse in together with that hammer-on riff on the fourth bar.

Chorus has a really good progression. I like the addition of the electric piano and the best part in the chorus is measure 29 where you do the harmony part.

I like how you fade in to the second chorus during the end of the second verse.

Solo was great. Wasn't too flashy and I liked how you used syncopation and triplet runs. Solid solo work.

I also like the lead work to the rest of the song.

Over all, great song.

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i've updated this a bit. there are a few slight changes to the leads and stuff.

I just want to sleep forever.

It reminds me of one of your previous works, 'when I'm gone'. It's got that similar emotional feel. definitely a grovermans song, hah.