#1
Well, this is called after my bleeding heart. Basically is about that I'm in love with a girl, and I'm afraid of her answer to my feelings.


Intro

Beneath my eyes, I see.
Your face is shining, I belive.
I want to belive,
Our destinies are interwined.
My end is near...

No!

Verse

Past my eyes, I want to see,
How you're stalking me.
I watch you from the city lights,
You're all alone, But I'm to shy.
Because in my past,
I was all broken,
And I'm afraid to be mispoken.
Cause you, are my dear....


Chorus

I'll bleeding for you.
I'd do anything for you.
Cause I can't keep my eyes from you.
I'll want you to notice me.
There's so many things I want to share.
Maybe tomorrow, When the lights are out.
After my bleeding heart...


Verse

As silence is broken, I can see you crying in front of my eyes.
I'm all withered and tored,
I'm sorry if i did wrong,
But your face lights up to my eyes,
You tell me that you've lied,
I get all cold...

No!


Chorus

I'll bleeding for you.
I'd do anything for you.
Cause I can't keep my eyes from you.
I'll want you to notice me.
There's so many things I want to share.
Maybe tomorrow, When the lights are out.
After my bleeding heart...

Bridge

I'll save you...
No matter what you do...(I fear you've lied).
But I'm going to take you back...
It doesn't matter what you say...
I love to watch your face...
I hate to say it's all for shame...
I guess, This is all love...

Chorus

I'll bleeding for you.
I'd do anything for you.
Cause I can't keep my eyes from you.
I'll want you to notice me.
There's so many things I want to share.
Maybe tomorrow, When the lights are out.
After my bleeding heart...


Critique is very welcome! And I'll kindly response if you have any ideas of what my song writing should be like(I am going to try it out), or any other things you have on your heart!
#2
Hey, I'm really sorry about this but you're going to have to delete this thread and repost it with a different title. The rules state that the title of the thread can only be your song title and the genre of the song or a sidenote like OTS (on the spot) or WIP (work in progress). If you repost this as just 'After my bleeding heart', you're set. I figured I'd let you know before this got closed.

Quote by Arthur Curry
it's official, vintage x metal is the saving grace of this board and/or the antichrist




e-married to
theguitarist
minterman22
tateandlyle
& alaskan_ninja

#3
^She's right. Please go check out the forum rules. I'll fix the title of this one, but read the rules for future reference.

Thanks.