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I wrote this song in response to the child abuse thats going on in the world and it really sparked something in me while I was writing it. Please critique me I would really appreciate it.


There’s blood all over the floor
All over the floor
Where it came from no one know
Where it came from no one cares

There’s screams coming from the door
That no one can ignore
Who calls out no one knows
Who calls out no one cares

But they’ll never know our pain
Our pain and our fear
Our pain and our fear
Until our time is here

There’s mark all over her chest
Across her breasts
Where they came from no one knows
Where they came from no one cares

There’s a death every day
Every day
Who died no one knows
Who died no one cares

And they sing, we don’t care
And were not scared
Of the marks on our face
Because we know our place

But they never hear our cries
The sadness and the lies
The sadness and the lies
Until our demise

But we sing, we don’t care
Life isn’t fair
We see the marks on their face
But we know our place
Were not god
We can’t all be god
Life and death isn’t our choice
We have no voice
We are
We are the shaken
We are the monsters
Underneath your bed
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wow. Pretty powerful stuff. Judging by your sig, this'd be kind of a metal/pop-ish (I don't really know how to classify Monsters) thing, which I think this would be great for.
C4C?
https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1195017
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one of the best, educated and logical posts I've ever seen on UG in the Pit. Well done good sir.