#1
Woke up from a dream tonight.
I could not sleep.
Dreamed of countrys in fear,
a fear you can not keep.
Saw people dieing, ´cause they did not
believe their lies.
Saw people crying, that couldn´t even
harm a fly.

But I will be fine,
as long as I don´t speak my mind.
I will be fine,
´cause I will keep my thoughts inside.

Today it was exciting,
I tried to lie.
Hope they won´t catch me,
because of thoughtcrime.
The tortured children, the cameras and
the policeman.
I hope someday, all this will come
to an end.

And I will be fine,
as long as I don´t speak my mind.
I will be fine,
´cause I will keep my thoughts inside.

Now there´s the kitchen window,
that I look through.
I see my dream is beginning,
to become true.

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Hope you like it.
Please leave me a comment.

Kind Regards!
Last edited by Plowback at Sep 28, 2009,
#2
I thought it flowed pretty good. I like how you ended it as well. The 1984 sort of stuff in the 2nd verses stood out against there rest but I think it works alright.

Overall pretty good I'd say
#3
i thought it was pretty sweet. i could use a little more clarification on whats goin on with the kitchen window. not really sure what you were sayin. make it a song!
#4
Quote by reelbigfish2020
i thought it was pretty sweet. i could use a little more clarification on whats goin on with the kitchen window. not really sure what you were sayin. make it a song!


Okay so, the song is about me telling you about a dream. That kitchen window phrase is in the present where I suddenly see that the nightmare is slowly becoming true.

And yeah, its inspired by 1984, one of my fav books of all time.
Will record the song wednesday with my mate.

Thanks for the great feedback so far guys!