#1
I didn't mean for this to sound emo if anyone thinks it is. Just wanted to establish that fact. anyways, here's the song:


Hurt, that won't go away
A wound in my heart, a wound that will stay
I, I trick myself, believing in you
Believing in what my mind knows ain't sane

Clothes, soaked in my sweat
Tears that won't fall, instead they relent
A cut that helps me, helps me to fake
It helps pretend that I'm okay!

[Chorus]
[I blame myself for, all the mistakes that you've made again
I'll just stop sleeping, just stop eating, hoping it's not dead
I blame myself for, all the mistakes that you've made again
I let the pain wash over my face, a fake smile helps me feel today]


Mind, mine's scattered again
Who do I believe, what will it achieve
Please, tell me a truth, just no more lies
Just please take my pain away

I, I hit the edge
I fall apart, I start to sway
Drugs, flow through my veins
My mind goes blank, as I start to wash it all away!

[Chorus]


It could use more maybe, but I just came up with it off the top of my head
#2
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#3
Quote by bassbeat77
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#5
Quote by Nirvana00125
I didn't mean for this to sound emo if anyone thinks it is. Just wanted to establish that fact. anyways, here's the song:


Hurt, that won't go away
A wound in my heart, a wound that will stay
I, I trick myself, believing in you
Believing in what my mind knows ain't sane


i dont know how to writein color to show our texts apart, so hope this dont confuse ya. The part i put in bold just doesn't sound right to me. I've read it a couple of times out loud and somethings just off here.

Clothes, soaked in my sweat
Tears that won't fall, instead they relent
A cut that helps me, helps me to fake
It helps pretend that I'm okay!

[Chorus]
[I blame myself for, all the mistakes that you've made again
I'll just stop sleeping, just stop eating, hoping it's not dead
I blame myself for, all the mistakes that you've made again
I let the pain wash over my face, a fake smile helps me feel today]


Mind, mine's scattered again
Who do I believe, what will it achieve
Please, tell me a truth, just no more lies

Just please take my pain away

Again, ,something feels "off" here

I, I hit the edge
I fall apart, I start to sway
Drugs, flow through my veins
My mind goes blank, as I start to wash it all away!

[Chorus]


It could use more maybe, but I just came up with it off the top of my head


overall, i really liked it. It did sound a tad emo, but not really. What style of song is it?