#1
Hey guys, only done a few songs. Hope you enjoy it

Waiting on a platform
A train that wont come
Shoes are old and worn
Feet burning in the sun

So much cooler inside
Surrounded in your seat
So much cooler inside
Another day complete


(So you) Wake up
Another day
(And you) Wake up
Not much more to say

You're staring at a screen
While your mind is in a dream
Of what you haven't done
Of a smoking gun

But you keep your bullets loaded
In case they come in need
You didn't board the boat
And it's sailed out to sea

(So you) Wake up
Another day
(And you) Wake up
Not much more to say
#2
Very, very.. normal.

Didn't excite me.

The "chorus" was the worst part IMO.. You could do without it.

"Of what you haven't done
Of a smoking gun"

That part didn't make much sense to me.

Overall, solid effort, think more about some creative word use, and less is more.. don't say things that don't really need to be said.
BOLD.