First lyrics of mine I've had the guts to show the internet, and now i'm here to be critiqued!

Viking Diplomacy

The hordes of war
The beauty of steel
Through Anatomy
Slice through thy flesh

You're forked now
No one is spared
Survival? No way!
Stained blood? FORK YEAH!

This ain't fun
This ain't fair


This can't be compared to piracy
Fork no, This is Viking Diplomacy
Replace fork with the oh so dirty F-word
Quote by CoreysMonster
Why, my pasty danish cracker, I believe you've got it!
I find your self-********** amusing. If these lyrics were for a viking themed metalcore band with a focus on humor then I'd give them a 10 out of 10.
Otherwise they're decent but shallow and kind of pointless.
Regardless, this was a refreshing thing to read compared to all of the pretense and metaphor that gets thrown about these parts.
Keep writing.

Let me know what you think of this if you don't mind: https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1208699

edit: why does censor ship get censored?
I want Super Saiyan abilities