#1
"Time is money!" you'd say, tapping my nose.
For a long time that phrase caused
your downfall in my mind.
It made you selfish.
I never realised that time wasted
is often enjoyed,
as is the case with money.
You had warped this phrase of hedonism
into a reminder
of how precious life is.
I'd ask you what we'd do today.
You'd wink and say
"Don't die.
We haven't gone for icecream yet".
I know you think that I'm someone you can trust.
But I'm scared i'll get scared and i swear i'll try to nail you back up.



Female SouperHero
#3
I like this. As stated above it's simple message, but it actually got me thinking.
If I don't meet you no more in this world, I'll meet you in the next one and dont be late.

JWU Baking and Pastry '13
#5
Quote by cofinboy
"Time is money!" you'd say, tapping my nose.
For a long time that phrase caused
your downfall in my mind.
It made you selfish.
I never realised that time wasted
is often enjoyed,
as is the case with money.
You had warped this phrase of hedonism
into a reminder
of how precious life is.
I'd ask you what we'd do today.
You'd wink and say
"Don't die.
We haven't gone for icecream yet".


I like the cute beginning and the next couple of lines, but I thought 'it made you selfish' somewhat spoiled the promising start.

But I like it as a whole, of course. Very nicely done. Short and sweet. Like my crit.

I LIKE YOUR FONTZ.

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