DragTheWaters11
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Join date: Jun 2009
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#1
This is only a short, mainly acoustic instrumental written by me. I have yet to come up with more leads, which is this is only a work in progress. And I also acknowledge the acoustic at 1:46 / 22 is a little choppy due to the fact that it was near impossible to get GP5 to get it at the right place (I'm somewhat of a noob with it lol).

But I'm open for C4C and suggestions as to structure and other things but I'd like to note that there's no room for any verse-prechorus-chorus type things in this as I only want it to be a short piece. However, suggest these anyways if you want because if we decide to make it a longer piece some suggestions as to structure would be fine.
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An Accolade to the Fallen Ones.gp5
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ch715dallat
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Join date: Jun 2006
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#2
for the second riff with the lead guitar, sorry but that sounds horrible, rea up on your theory a bit more, you have so many notes out of key it sounds awful.

for the 3rd riff that you said was choppy, its probably because you should have it at a different tempo, as it clearly doesnt fit right at that tempo in 4/4.

and again for the next part as you have that last hanging note whichruins the rhythm of the riff.

anyhoo, i dunno if you like progressive but maybe have a listen to my work in progress if you fancy
https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1214549

DragTheWaters11
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Join date: Jun 2009
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#3
It's alright. I know it's not that great, but the help with the choppy acoustic helps a lot. Thank you very much.

Would anyone like to comment on the acoustic? You didn't really say whether the acoustic sounded good or not.
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Ulalume
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Join date: Feb 2008
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#5
Its an average piece. The distortion guitar virtually serves no purpose. Aside from that, the acoustic guitar is arranged well; it just doesn't have much to it. Theres no real feel to it, no real melody. Occasional bits and pieces that are nice, but as an instrumental it just isn't memorable.
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