#1
This is my first song and I don't really like it but I always hear that you're always your own worst critic. I think it sounds too simple and unoriginal, but if anyone has any advice for improvement or for a title I'd really appreciate it. Thank you.


[1]
I’m standing alone
On a crowded street
The people walk by
I always was afraid to meet

I’ve been waiting for you
For the longest time
Now I see where you are
Well that’s just fine

[Chorus]
Now I’m at the edge of my seat
Wonderin’ who I will meet.
Just to get away from you.

And I don’t really care
If you’re gonna be there
I wanna get away from you

I see everyone
But you’re not the one
I once thought before

Cause now I can see
You weren’t there for me
I know you’re not the one

[2]
I gave you a chance
To prove me wrong
Thought you wanted to be
In my song

You left me waiting for you
For the longest time
Now I feel like a fool
Why did I waste my time?

[Chorus]

[3]
A new beginning is here
To change my ways
To everyone that comes
Don’t think it’ll be the same

‘Cause I was waiting for you
For the longest time
Now I’ll try it again
I won’t trip up this time.

[Chorus]
#2
The stanza's aren't too weak, and the song has a good focus. I think you should rework the endings of most of the verses, maybe let them carry into the rest of the verses better. Specifically the last line of the first stanza.

The people walk by
I always was afraid to meet

I just don't really feel any flow there.


Not a bad piece. Not too interesting, but that could be fixed with strong melody.

Wanna take a look at mine? I'm fairly new to the writing thing as well.

https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1216217