#1
I posted this song awhile ago but decided to revise and re-arrange it. So here it is! Thanks for any tips or crits!

Night Terror

Verse 1:
The rope around my neck bears down this vision of my fall,
The leering masses scream for the call,
in my mind the time bomb is ticking closer to the doom,
In my chest my heart is beating, every thump
reverberating through the room!
Through your mind pulses the coarse voices
crying, screaming, dying through your eyes
Can you set it free, send it away?

Chorus 1:
Twisted, haunting, creeping, falling!
Are they true or a dream?
Creeping, searching, crawling, crying!

Verse 2:
Again I lay, body Paralyzed but mind awake,
The shadows move past my bed as the clock
ticks time away!
Weird and twisted shaped flit past my sight,
standing at my bedside, staring into my eyes!
No way to run away, no way to escape captive
of my own inner thoughts, fears, and dreams!
Slipping under the bed, creeping through my mind!
Slipping in and out out of waking and fantasy,
mind wandering, am I living or dead?
what is this I see? Shadows are fleeting silence,
Slowly creeping closer to me!

Chorus 2:
Creeping closer, ever closer!
Are they fact or fiction?
Crawling, climbing, screaming, flying!

Repeat Chorus 1

Bridge:
Open my Heart
just let the beating stop
if it will drive
these demons away!
Cut off the life if
it will let my mind
go free away!

Guitar solo and instrumental interlude

Verse 3:
The mist creeps slowly,
fading in and out of reality, clouding all I see!
Please Wake me wake me!
The Shapes in the corners come alive walking ever closer
long claws reach out before melting away
Swirling in my head, around my bed, icy sweat soaking
me! coming closer I'm paralyzed moving nothing
but my eyes, mind locks on these inward demons and fantasies!
look past these visions, set my mind free!
Wake me from this monsters spell over me!
slay these dragons that haunt me!

Repeat Chorus 1
Repeat Chorus 2

Outro
Eyelids snap open
the sweat is soaking
the beasts are receding
the sun it is rising and
my heart is still beating.
Last edited by bagpipemetal at Oct 16, 2009,
#2
I like it all except the outro and bridge, but yet again its hard to judge for me with out hearing the musical context. over all I think it's pretty good
#3
Thanks! I'm probably going to change the bridge since it's kind of clunky, The style would be Heavy Metal with clean guitar in the verses and heavy guitar in the chorus and bridge.
#4
Quote by bagpipemetal
Thanks! I'm probably going to change the bridge since it's kind of clunky, The style would be Heavy Metal with clean guitar in the verses and heavy guitar in the chorus and bridge.

pretty tight. I like it. yeah the bridge might need some fixin'