chexered
has lots of strings
Join date: Feb 2009
189 IQ
#1
hola compadres

heres a song for you

its veryyyyy new

only a few parts to it

help with expanding would be sweettastic

C4C as always
Attachments:
hang me by my toes.gp5
ch715dallat
BTBAM=Godly
Join date: Jun 2006
3,466 IQ
#2
not bad, dont like the triplet riff at the star, but thats just because its so generic, liked the clean part tho, that was a nice suprise, the next lead part ws a tad too quick tempo'd i think, maybe knock that down a bit and youre all set.
Piscasis
Banned
Join date: Jul 2009
95 IQ
#3
I really heard some Btbam from measures 18-27. There was a bit too much open D imo. I'd suggest fixing that up by throwing a few different notes in there or keeping it but change the time signature. Perhaps 5/8 from 2-5. As well I'd change bars 29-32 to 7/8 time. I have changed it and attached a file of it here so you can see what I mean. Overall it has potential. Keep adding more and be creative.
Attachments:
hang me by my toes.gp5
Last edited by Piscasis at Oct 16, 2009,
chexered
has lots of strings
Join date: Feb 2009
189 IQ
#4
Quote by Piscasis
I really heard some Btbam from measures 18-27. There was a bit too much open D imo. I'd suggest fixing that up by throwing a few different notes in there or keeping it but change the time signature. Perhaps 5/8 from 2-5. As well I'd change bars 29-32 to 7/8 time. I have changed it and attached a file of it here so you can see what I mean. Overall it has potential. Keep adding more and be creative.


definitely interesting, i like it, i might keep the beginning the way it is though.
but thanks for the crit