#1
Hi,

so basically this is my first ever attempt at writing a song. I'm no drummer so don''t mind the drums please... It's kind of a progmetal song I think. Very short, it isn't finished yet... I'm making this for my new two piece band Orion.

Would like to have some critique though

And yes the 21/16 in the beginning is pretty random
Attachments:
orion-thesong.gp5
orion-thesong.mid
#3
Some real instruments would benefit greatly here haha. Really cool sounding riffs and ideas just really disjointed.But it sounds really cool! Just some real, nasty electric guitar and massive drums...this would be tight. Keep working on it!
#5
Hey, there's good riffs in it! But yeah the drums arent really developped, it would be much better, try to add a Hi hat ( number 46 for the open one) it will sound much much better !

Thanks for the critique
#6
Quote by flaphead325
Hey, there's good riffs in it! But yeah the drums arent really developped, it would be much better, try to add a Hi hat ( number 46 for the open one) it will sound much much better !

Thanks for the critique


Allright thanks, I'll try that. I have also made some changes to the beginning and stuff, I feel it's coming more together now