#1
I wrote this song with the intention of keeping it simple. simple words, ideas, versus, even the chord progression is simple. its in Gmaj. i want someone to listen to the song and be reminded of a girl theyve seen, but cant have. or, girls that see guys, but cant have. im a guy, so i wrote it with the perspective of a penis. simple enough?

I see this girl everyday
Its like she puts herself im my way
I wanna ask her if she can stay
But I do see she'll be busy all day

Oh the way she made me perfect
While the world took a trip upside down
She already retraced her footsteps
Now she's leavin me without a sound
Without a sound yeahhhh

Next time I've got my feet on the ground
I'll take a second to stop and look around
Is there anything even left to be found?
Now that she's boarded her plane
She is leaving town

Oh the way she kept things perfect
While the world took its trip upside down
She already retraced her footsteps
Now she's leavin me without a sound
Without a sound

I know that shes got a thing or two
To do
A string wrapped around a finger
Or two
I tried out all my smoothest lines
They work in the mirror
In my mind every time
Once I got it all down I came to find
She's callin out the number
Of some other guy
Some other guy yeahhh


this is all still a work in progress. i wanna say its 95% done, but i still think i can add a verse to lengthen it. thanks in advance for the feedback
#2
come on people i need to know if this is worthy of an open mic night!! yay or nay! gimme somethin!
#3
Quote by CharlesSchwab69
come on people i need to know if this is worthy of an open mic night!! yay or nay! gimme somethin!



I think its pretty good... friend I have the music you have the lyrics... do you wanna make a song??? could I use your lyrics for my music???


please answer me on johnkoutsou@hotmail.com because I will not see it here!!! thank you!!!