#1
At first it seemed like this would never die
Now I'm here telling you my last goodbye
There are to many things left to mend
All of this is coming to a end
I know that this goes against all our vows
But I don't see how it matters now
Now it's time for us to part
You will forever have a place in my heart
#3
Quote by d1sturbed4eva
At first it seemed like this would never die
Now I'm here telling you my last goodbye
Great beginning

There are to many things left to mend
All of this is coming to a end
This part is the only part I dont like. It seems really forced IMO

I know that this goes against all our vows
But I don't see how it matters now
Now it's time for us to part
You will forever have a place in my heart
Nice last two lines. It ends it well. Wish it was longer though, you could do more with it.

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#4
There is already a song called Last Goodbye by Kenny Wayne Shepherd. First off I'd suggest renaming.
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