#1
this my first song ive posted in a forum . be nice


verse 1

if your gonna try
and be honest
dont try forcing this
upon us

if your gonna try
and be honest

you've never been there when we needed help
the only lessons i learned
were the ones i taught myself

chorus

dont you dare say
your systems not corrupt
im looking through
your eyes
and what im seeing isnt good enough

verse 2

we live in a world where
some people have a problem
when other people want to be with each other

well as long as they both love ,
love one another
i cant see why your god would have a problem

repeat chorus

middle 8

shut your eyes
and imagine a place
where your not judged by
the colour of your face

if you think its real
you can make it real
if you know its real
you can make it real

chorus x2

post chorus

theres only one chance
this is our first and our last
to stop going nowhere
and get somewhere fast
#2
I rarely post in this section, but I'm nice anyway.

My favourite lines were:

"the only lessons i learned
were the ones i taught myself"

"shut your eyes
and imagine a place
where your not judged by
the colour of your face"


I think those lines stood out from what I thought was a cliché-esque song.
I liked it, overall. I hope that didn't sound discouraging. I'm not a good songwriter.